12/06/2024
Question that inspired this post:
This post was from someone looking for an Au Pair program from Kenya in the EU
"I will pay for my visa and flight tickets
Hey there potential host families! Are you ready for a dose of fun and adventure? Because that's what I bring to the table! Imagine a mix of Mary Poppins' magic with a sprinkle of SpongeBob's silliness - that's me in a nutshell!
My name is _____ I'm from Kenya. I finished my undergraduate Degree in travel and tour operations management. I’m 22 years old and I speak fluent English, I'm learning French and German as well. I'm all about spreading joy and laughter wherever I go. From building Lego towers taller than me to creating epic pillow forts that could rival a castle, I'm the ultimate playtime pal! When it comes to kids, I've got the experience, ( being the firstborn in my family)- from organizing treasure hunts to mastering the art of making the perfect PB&J sandwich, I've got it covered!
In my free time, you'll find me chasing sunsets for the perfect Instagram shot, exploring new hiking trails, cooking, swimming, reading novels, cleaning as well or trying out the latest baking trends (my cookies may not always look perfect, but they sure taste amazing! ). I'm also a self-proclaimed karaoke champion, so get ready for some impromptu sing-along sessions! (just kidding, my voice isn’t that good but at least I try.)
I believe that life is one big adventure, and I'm always up for trying new things. Whether it's learning a new language, mastering a TikTok dance, or simply enjoying a cosy movie night with a bowl of popcorn, I'm in! So, if you're looking for an Au Pair who can bring a dash of fun, a sprinkle of creativity, and a whole lot of love to your family, then look no further - I'm your girl! Let's create unforgettable memories together!"
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Improved Pitch
Experienced and Energetic Au Pair Available from September 2024
Hello potential host families! My name is Kelly, a 22-year-old from Kenya. I am fluent in English and currently learning French and German. I finished my undergraduate degree in Travel and Tours Operations Management and am now excited to embark on an Au Pair journey.
Childcare Experience
Being the oldest sibling, I have extensive experience caring for children of various ages. I've organized treasure hunts, built epic pillow forts, and mastered the art of making the perfect PB&J sandwich! I am also a certified babysitter and have completed a first-aid course.
What I Can Offer
As your Au Pair, I will bring fun and creative energy to your household. From engaging kids in arts and crafts to exploring new hiking trails together, I believe in creating unforgettable memories. I can also assist with homework, prepare healthy meals, and keep the house tidy.
About Me
In my free time, you'll find me chasing sunsets for the perfect Instagram shot, trying out new baking trends (my cookies may not look perfect, but they're delicious!), or singing along to my favourite tunes. I'm always up for trying new things and embracing new cultures.
Why I Want to Be an Au Pair
I believe that being an Au Pair is an incredible opportunity for personal growth and cultural exchange. I am eager to immerse myself in a new environment, share my Kenyan culture, and learn from your family. This experience will not only allow me to develop my childcare skills but also broaden my horizons. If you're looking for a responsible, caring, and enthusiastic Au Pair who can bring joy and laughter to your family, I would love to hear from you. Please feel free to contact me at [email] or [phone number] to discuss further. I can't wait to embark on this exciting adventure together!
Best regards,
Name
What was improved in the Pitch
The provided pitch has some good elements but could be improved to make it more effective for finding a host family as an Au Pair. Here's an analysis comparing it to the tips from the search results:Positives:
It has a friendly, casual tone as recommended.
It highlights the cultural exchange aspect by mentioning wanting to learn new languages and experience new things, which au pairs value highly.
It gives personal details about interests, hobbies, and personality to help families envision having the au pair as part of their household.
It mentions relevant experiences with children from being the oldest sibling.
Areas for Improvement:
The opening is quite informal/gimmicky, which may not appeal to all families looking for a responsible caregiver.
It lacks specific details about childcare experience, qualifications like certifications, and motivation for being an au pair beyond just having fun.
It doesn't directly address the host family's needs and how the au pair can help them specifically.
It could use more structure by separating content into clear sections like in the example in.
Suggestions:
Open with a more professional introduction: State your name, age, languages spoken, and that you're looking for a host family starting on X date.
Highlight relevant experience: Provide details on any previous childcare roles, babysitting jobs, certifications like first aid, etc.
Explain your motivation: Why do you want to be an au pair? What do you hope to gain from the cultural exchange experience?
Address host family needs: Mention skills that can help the family like tutoring, cooking healthy meals, engaging kids in activities, etc.
Use formatting: Separate content into sections with headers like "About Me", "Childcare Experience", "What I Can Offer", etc. for clarity.
Close with a call-to-action: Invite families to contact you and reiterate what makes you a great candidate.
By incorporating these suggestions, the pitch will be more well-rounded, highlighting both your personality and relevant qualifications as an au pair candidate. This can increase your chances of making a positive impression on potential host families.
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